Ten page review: have your first ten pages assessed by a book publishing professional

Are you working on a manuscript, but not sure what an agent or publisher would make of it?

Have you struggled to get constructive feedback on your writing from well-meaning friends and family members, and had trouble finding some honest advice without having to fork out loads of money for a full manuscript assessment?

Or have you been submitting to agents and publishers, and not hearing back?

I understand, and I can help.
It’s so frustrating not to hear anything back from an agent or publisher after you’ve worked so hard on your manuscript. Unfortunately, it’s a story I hear all the time from unpublished writers. (And sometimes even published ones.)

Maybe, in hindsight, there are things you wonder if you should have changed about your story, or your characters, or the length of your manuscript, before you sent it off via an electronic submissions portal.

But without feedback, you’ll never know whether the things you wonder about are the things that turned off the industry professional. Or whether it was something else entirely that led her to decide no.


Show me your first ten pages.
I’m in the very unusual position of having experience as a literary agent, as a book editor (both in-house and freelance), and as a published author.

As a literary agent, I understand how agents and publishers think.The sorts of questions and reservations they have pop into my head whenever I read a query from an unpublished writer. I know what they’re looking for – and what it takes to get published.

As an author, I know how hard it is to write – and finish writing – a book. I understand the vulnerability of putting your work out there for strangers to read and enjoy, or dismiss too quickly.

As a book editor, I’ve worked with many different types of authors across a variety of genres and writing styles, at vastly different levels of writing experience. My job as an editor is not to impose my personal taste, but to help you make your work the best it can possibly be.

Why only the first ten pages?
In my experience, if your manuscript has areas for improvement, they will be obvious to a publishing industry professional in the opening pages.

  • For fiction writers, it could be an issue with story, or characterisation, or tone. Or it might be challenges common to many authors such as repetition, cliche, or starting in the wrong place.
  • If you’re writing nonfiction, all the same elements apply  – with the added challenge of finding ways to address the invisible points of resistance a publisher might have about your subject, before you even submit it.

First ten pages: Have a book industry  professional review the first ten pages of your manuscript
I will edit and annotate my response to your first ten pages, providing constructive feedback on your writing style and storytelling.

That’s ten double-spaced pages in a standard font; up to a maximum of 3,000 words.

Price: $197
To book:

  1. Finalise payment by going to PayPal.Me/LloydLiterary or emailing me for electronic funds transfer details
  2. Email me your first ten pages (double-spaced; up to 3,000 words) in Word, PDF or RTF formats
  3. I will respond to your work within seven days of payment.